请帮我修改一下英语作文
The Earth is our hometown.It's very importent to us.Protecting environment is our duty which need us to do our best .
However,there are many kinds of pollutions around. Take my hometown as an example,the enviroment of our hometown is becoming worse and worse.People put garbages and dirty water into the river, release toxic gases, cut tress and so on.All of these activities make our hometown not amazing now.
We really hope that our hometown can become as beautiful as before.It's necessary for us to do something for it.According to this I have some suggestions we can go to school or work by bike to reduce gas pollution.Besides, we should not cut trees,instead of it we should plant a lot of trees.What's more, we should use less plastic things.
Let's become green consumers to make our world more beautiful，shall we？
重新给你整理了一下结构，补充了些材料，换了一些表达方式，并将语病修改了。希望作为参考，自己再修改一下。
My Good Friend
【修改】
I have a good friend[.She is]→named Sun Ruiyao[.]→, [She删is] a pretty girl. She lives in BeiJing [now删].[I’m very miss her.] → I miss her very much.
【】点评：这里把前几句连在一起，是为了让句子更紧凑。英语忌啰嗦。用的she太多。
I think she is the most beautiful girl I have ever seen. She has [two删] big eyes[. And she has删] lovely nose. [with long hair.] →She also has beautiful long hair.
One day ,We were playing [at the class finish] →after class. A girl lost the Chinese book ,so she asked us to lend her a [Chinese book] →one.[I am not very glad,so I said”I don’t have the Chinese book,I lost the book,too.”] →I was reluctant to lend her mine, so I said I also had the book lost. But Sun Ruiyao was very glad [加to offer help],[so删] [gave] → giving the book to her at once. I was very [blush] →ashamed. From now on, I will be [a good student, just like] →as kind as her.
【】点评：前面beautiful的描述如果能放到这件事情之后描述，就会有引申的效果→心灵美更加深了外表美。
Although she doesn’t live in Huaibei, [but删！] I think we will [be good friends forever] →always be good friends!
【后记】如果能详细说明我们如何“成为”朋友更好。这里没说明白，看不出来你们是朋友。
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