请大家帮我修改一下这篇英语作文（初三水平）
不用复数，但filled 前面应该加be
It's my first time that failed an exam.
Suddenly, a girl came to me and asked me ...
There is still something else
超过十个、二十个单词没有关系的
我要反驳一下前面的那位learn的过去式两个都很常用。。以及第一句因为是in the past three years所以应该是I have learnt。。weekends的话介词on和at都可以。不过on更常用。。然后我同样认为最后的那句应改为 I want to be a English teacher。。还有就是我觉得应该是begin playing sports有点奇怪。。这边应该是begin to do的结构吧。。playing sports的搭配我没见过所以不确定有没有。。
a donate excise,这个表达有点费解，我觉得换成 a donate activity一场捐赠活动
From May 20th to May 22th,在一个句子里面的状语部分From 要换成from
既然前面提到的是There will a donate activity....那么后面这句接的就是活动，不是人啦，所以要将we 换成It
一个半小时的说法： one and a half hours
You can buy many beautiful pen-bags which were did by ourselves in there.(你的原句）
这句里面的错误有 were 和did2个动词一起并列，in there副词前面还带介词。You和ourselves 指示关系矛盾。可以改为：You can buy many beautiful DIY pen-bags there.(不用强调是我们，或是谁做的，你说DIY就已经暗示了）
And you can also buy many things such as hand writing,painting pictures,the books which have teachers' signature,good students notebooks and so on(你的原句）
给我的感觉你是再尽量把句子写长，你的语法基础还不错，但是问题是写长以后问题就出来了。你的which 后面要限定的东西是一个呢，还是两个呢？都糅杂在一起了，其实你可以都用名词短语啊。And you can also buy many( lots of 如果你想丰富的话，换一个近义词）things such as hand writings,paintings ,books with teacher's signature,student notebooks and so on.(注意名词做形容词，通常单数student union,除个别会复数出现，我记得的有sports shoes里面的sports)
There are many notebooks and pens too.我觉得这句你可以综合到上一句里面去，意思重复，可以不要。
On the last day,we will hold a special show,is a magic show!这个句子你少了一个which,或者你也可以说we will hold a special show called magic.
You must like it.这个句子你想表达的是“一定”，但是这里用must不如will。我说不上来，反正很怪的语气，外国人不这么说。因为like 是人的心理活动，你不能取强加的。
All the money which earned....你要是想定语从句呢，就要写完整，which was earned,,,要么你就去掉which只留下earned用后置定语就可以了。will be sent( 过去分词）
for us...这里不是for you,前面你说的是we just want to....，所以啊，要前后指示要保持一致
最后一句有点口语化，用在这里不妥。而且主语又变成了you,与前面又不一致了。可以改为we will do our best.或者比较激烈点的,带号召性的，Let 's start to do it.
粗看后修改意见：
第四行：一个半小时应是one and a half hours
第五行：did换成made、in there的in 去掉
第六行：painting
第七行：signatures
第九行：which is a magic show 你把which漏了
第十行：you must like it 改为 I'm sure you will like it
第十一行：去掉which
第十二行：can't 改为shouldn't
另外 can also 是正确语序
文章是否切题，行文是否精彩我不做出评价。
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先can再also，不然反了就错了
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