帮我看一下这篇英语作文有什么语法错误没有，应该不多。。
没有看大你的这篇英语作文，其实英语作文不要用太复杂的句型就、语法，不然可读性不强，建议多积累一些词汇和常用句型，更加分
你的作文写得很棒！思路清晰，观点例子也完善。中间有一点语法错误。希望继续努力。一下是我的修改，期望你的文章会更好。I think that we should grow up with good books, especially during the period of our studying. Because the good books can provide benificial knowledges to us. They can not only make us to be a person with lots of knowledge, but alos can tach us to be a kind and knowldgeable person which do pa graet help to our growing up. Although the books are lifeless and cannot talk like our human beings, thay can talk with us by the informational workds which teach us a lot in many aspects. Tese inforamtion are opercious for they can make us grow up more healthily and happily. For example, they can teach us how to survive in an dangerous condition, how to do things correctly etc. So i do think our growing up can not be devided with the good books. At the same time, we should make good use of the good books.
大毛病没有，一些小细节改善一下就好了。第二段，lesson后面最好用句号，然后next第一个字母大写。and then 那里也一样，最好重新开始一句，便于句子的理解，也更符合英语的习惯。
再有就是在not only 前应该加should，才能表达出你是建议她去怎么做。
还有，开头是dear Li Hua ，最后署名也是Li Hua 。。。
答：I want to tell you about my hobby. I collect shoes（改成I like collecting shoes更好）.I have benn（是been） doing（加 this） since I was 13. my friend know（knows） i like NBA very much. so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of ...
答：Thursday April 12th rainy Today is(改为was) really too bad!When I opened an umbrella,Ifound my purse is(改为was) missing.there was (改为were)some money and(去掉and) my photos and so on in the purse.I looked for it everywhere,but still can't found(改为couldn't find...
答：1.Green color is the best color for our eyes. 中的color可以省略，因为green本来就有绿色的意思，再加color显得有点累赘。2.So we should not cut down trees and using fewer papers that they make from wood.中should后面应该加原形，所以后半部分应该改成use fewer...wood. 后面那个修饰...
答：第八句：句子衔接有误，导致后一句无主语，建议改为On Friday，it's going to rain，and be very windy 译文：下个星期一是一个晴天，最高温度9摄氏度，最低温度5摄氏度。星期二也是个天气晴朗的日子，最高温度12摄氏度，最低温度可达6摄氏度以下。星期三会有微风，这使得空气变得寒冷，最高温度...
答：您好!!改正如下:This is my first time (to particpate) in English Super League. Before then, I didn't know (anything) about this. Then I (searched on) the net and looked up the English Super League. I saw many photos. In(these) photos, many children were preparing (for)...
答：to do their job(to work)总评：如果是四级只能得5分，还要遇到好老师，我过了六级的，但英语水平也一般，不过作文看过很多，点评也是，在说也知道四六级评分标准 本篇整体思想不是很明确，语法错误很多，在追求用复杂句子的时候错误百出，但连接词用的还可以，注意句式的变换和语义的连贯与逻辑 ...
答：that let me fall in love with travelling 改成 that made me fall in love with travelling I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful scenery 改成 I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful sceneries.Also I make so many new friends during the journey. 改成 Also I can ...
答：more clearly. If you can make use of the lessons from failure, and try again and again, success will come to you sooner or later. As the saying goes, “Failure is the mother of success.” “No pains, no gains.”最后一段建议所有第二人称改成第一人称 希望回答对你有帮助 ...
答：主要问题是语法错误，语句不够简洁。I hear from you will go back mother land.---改I hear that you will go back to mother land。Terfore we want to open a farewell party for you---改 therefore，we want to hold a farewell party for you.We hope that you can take in this...
答：watch Butterfly Lovers in Tianjin Grand Theater.(invite要加d，过去式)There are two reasons(复数) for seeing（看什么什么电影应该用see） Butterfly Lovers...Here are servial suggestions after we appreciated(这里改用过去式，也可以用saw) the opera.接下来就没有什么大的语法错误了 ...
