我写的英语作文请帮我看下有没有语法错误请帮忙改正谢谢
你只放个图上来，而不把作文打进来，心不诚哦。这样别人很难给你改。我把几个主要错误列在下面了。如果你想要更进一步的改正，就需要把全文打进来。另外你要练一下手写字体(能够把字母连写的)。你写的字虽然看着漂亮，但是写起来慢，读时不好认，两边都费劲。
1. 你只看了一个电影，要用单数 a movie。
2. Watch a movie 是在家看电影，通常是在电视上看。现在也指在线看。到电影院看电影是 see a movie。我看你写的开头还以为你把朋友请到家里来了呢。
3. 讲故事的时候时态要一致，不要有时用过去时有时用现在时。when we get to the cinema应该是when we got to the cinema。
4. 电影院工作人员不是waitress，应该用the lady working there。
5. 她说完话结尾你忘了加引号。
6. a distance way应该是a distance away。
7. always ready应该是always be ready，有情态动词should时不要忘了谓语动词。
This story reminds me one of my 【experiences】. I had 【many difficulties】in learning English 【because I was born and raised in China 土生土长的】, and was 【especially poor】 in oral English. 【My classmate always make fun of my mistakes】. However, I never 【give】 up. Instead I kept listening to the tape and practicing speaking 【English】 whenever I got a chance. As I expected, my English 【improved】 quickly, to my surprise, I even get an “A” in the oral English exam.
In my opinion, though life can be hard, we shouldn’t easily 【give up】 what we do. If we make up our minds, and try again and again, we will finally get the sunshine we want. As the saying goes, “God helps those who help themselves. Success only belongs to those who have strong wills.”
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It has caused substantial impact on the society and our daily life. Sometimes, in our dormitory maybe have some controversial（CONTROVERSIAL是形容词性，建议改为名词词性，或者在其后加个ideas）.
As is known to all, a harmonious dormitory life is important to college students and benefits all the members. On one hand, we can have a good rest and put our heart into study. On the other hand, we will have a good mood and enjoy being together.
How to establish the harmonious dormitory life ? I belivev(believe) it is hight(应该是HIGH吧) time that we took some effective measures to solve the（可以把THE改为THIS ） problem. As the（可以将THE改为A） proverb says (goes), “Custom makes all things easy..” It is an undeniable fact that try to get rid of your dirty habits, if there are any（这句话写得很牵强，不过没有语法错误）. A bright future is waiting for us when all the measures are taken seriously implementation.(最后一句有点问题。从中文理解应该是：所有的措施被采取严格的执行。实际上ARE TAKEN在这里是被动了，后面SERIOUSLY修饰taken还是可以理解，至于最后加了一个名词【执行】就错误了，至于原因不赘述)
行文上面还是可以的，亮点在于语言还不算太单调，不过缺点不是语法错误，其实是组织行文的结构和逻辑上的问题。你的论点和论据太散了，尤其是开头，建议换了。然后衔接性不强，感觉一条一条就是套进去的。这个分数可能就是在10到11分左右（未换算）。
加油啊！
PS：本人仅是英语爱好者，随便改改，如果有错误的话请指正。
第一句改为Nowadays, more and more people prefer talking about dormitory life, because it plays a significant role in our daily life.
Sometimes, in our dormitory maybe have some controversial. 这个句子缺少主语，另外controversial是形容词应用名词controversy
How to establish the harmonious dormitory life ? 句中the 改为a
It is an undeniable fact that try to get rid of your dirty habits, if there are any. that 从句中缺少主语
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